5/6 Persuasive Writing Examples

Here are a few very persuasive pieces of 5/6 writing...

 

You would be crazy not to believe…

Do you want to be safer? Do you want to have more fun in your spare time? Do you want to be more social with your friends? Then a phone is the way to go!

To begin with, no one can deny that you feel safer when you have a mobile phone, with reminders and constant status updates to your parents! Apple have officially realised an online poll to ask how many people they have helped in emergencies. So far the percentage of helped is 92.5%. Now if you don’t agree by now keep reading!

Furthermore, no one but a fool would think that that fun in your spare time is a bad idea! Every kid is bored so why not entertain them? Don’t forget that you can surf the web, use maps if you’re lost or need help with homework. What more could you ask for?

Another thought…

Do you really think that being social is a bad idea? Look if you need help with homework or are bored a friend can assist you or entertain you! You can also chat with friends using a wide range of social media! Or you could just play some games. Just hear me out!

To recap, obviously students under the age of thirteen MUST have mobile phones. They WILL be protected! They WILL have fun! They WILL be more social!

 

My question is…

 

Who wouldn’t want that?

 

By Aaron Fantin

 


 

TPAC          Want to be safe

Do you want to be safe? Do you want to walk without thinking of the dangers that could occur and maybe having an accident?

 

My opening argument is that all children under 13 should have a phone as it makes you a lot safer when by yourself. 80% of abductions happen from not having a phone proven by recent apple surveys.

 

Additionally how dangerous is that letting your child Rome around by themselves without a phone what if your child’s makes it 81% of children and you call yourself a parent?

 

Furthermore did you even consider the fact of your child’s health because you know how children are always riding their bikes? What if your child is injured in a mishap then what are you going to do because you can’t call 000

 

In collusion so if you’re still thinking of waiting till your child is 13 to give them a phone then you’re CRAZY with a capital C.

 

By AIDEN.SMITH!!!

 


 

Phones! Can’t Live With Them Can’t Live Without Them.

 

“Have you given your child a mobile phone and their still in primary school?” “What immature and irresponsible parents you are!” There are many reasons why a kid in primary school should not possess an IPhone. I can tell you some now. Kids are not responsible and will break their phone and no one wants that! This will also lead to financial issues. I won’t go on for too long but I have one more reason I am going to give you “do you want your child to be embarrassed?” I thought so.

 

To begin with, recent studies show that 38% of teenagers in high school are embarrassed because there Mum has to pick them up every day. They don’t have a phone and it is dangerous for them to walk home or take the bus encase something happens to them. “Do you want that to happen to child?”  You need to let your child learn how to take a bus, tram or train. This will help them later on in life.

 

Another one of my reasons is responsibility! “Can you really trust your child to look after a really expensive device that they are bound to break, loose or drop?” “I know I won’t!” you have to very responsible to own a phone under the age of thirteen! Are kids really that responsible! Can you really trust them? “I don’t think so!” They could easily leave it at school overnight in the teacher’s desk and a robber comes and robs the phone, without insurance that will be really expensive.

 

As a follow up, it would be stupid to give your child a phone as I said in my second argument they are bound to break, lose or drop their phone. This will put you into a critical state in financial issues. This will be bad because your child will think that he/she had a mobile phone once and they cold want another phone and not understand that they are too irresponsible to own another phone. This will make you feel bad and give in to them.

 

In a nutshell it would be stupid, irresponsible, a bad example and incredibly immature of you as parent to give your child a phone.  “Would you like to be known as one of the above parents?”

By Elley Steenhuizen 5/6 E

 


 

What a Cat-tastrophe!

 

Have you ever seen your cat scratching away at your glass doors? Have you thought, oh little kitty I’ll let you out? Stop thinking that immediately! Because on the outside they make you think they’re sweet and innocent, but in reality they’re demons! They want to do nothing more than to make you cry and ruin the lives of others.

 

I know they look cute, and trustworthy but on the inside they’re evil with a mind that screams KILL, and loves nothing more than murdering innocent wildlife. Just imagine you’re a little bird flapping your wings away and MEOW a cat jumps up from out of nowhere and bites them clear off! How would you feel? I know you’re thinking, hey that’s just a bird not like it could tear apart something like a kangaroo. Well guess what they can! I assure you, as friendly as they look as soon as you turn your back they could be up to anything!

 

That’s not enough, hey? Well tiger and lion are deadly, and really they’re just very, very large cats. Have you ever heard of a trained pet tiger? NO!? Well that’s exactly my point. Cats can’t be trained to be gentle loving creatures which they aren’t, just like their distant relatives the BIG CATS! The cats that can tear animals double their size to threads! My mum had a budgie called Specks, when she bought a cat around 2 years old, that next morning, SQWAUK! Her budgie tuned into nothing more than a pile of feathers, bones and blood! You don’t want that do you?

You’re still thinking but they’re so cute?! On the outside they definitely are but their hearts are just an endless black abyss that wants to break yours. At night when they would go strolling along a fence happily, no care in the world, it would fall off and WOOF! WOOF! It gets itself eaten by a ferocious bulldog! The next three days what do you do? Cry and cry because you no longer have your beloved kitty! You don’t think it’s the cats fault? Well it’s certainly not the dog’s fault your cat purposely fell off the fence, purposely walked near the dog’s kennel, and purposely got itself killed to break your kind loving heart!

 

So to avoid disappointment keep your mangy old feline inside full stop! No one wants a broken heart or wants to talk to the RSPCA about your cat going around Australia and killing everyone and everything for its pleasure! Thank you for reading and I’m sure I won’t be seeing any smelly old tabbies wondering around outside again!

 

Jade Easton